The breath of spring
whispers to a frigid threshold.
The breath of spring
sends winter-weary bones basking
in warmer days as they unfold
into new hopes and dreams untold –
the breath of spring.
Copyright © September 2011 Norma Martiri
Form: Rondelet
The rondelet is a classic French repeating form consisting of only 7 lines with a syllable count of 4/8/4/8/8/8/4. The rhyme scheme is AbAabbA. The three repeating A lines are the shorter lines.
The term roundelay originates from 1570, from Modern French rondelet, a diminutive of rondel meaning “short poem with a refrain,” literally “small circle”. From Old French rondel, a diminutive of rond meaning “circle, sphere,” originally an adjective from roont. The spelling developed by association with lay (noun) “poem to be sung.”
Wonderful, Norma, and you found a matching picture. For a form that looks so awkward in its description, it lends itself to some lovely work.
Here in the Midwest, summer still has us in a death grip, aching for fall, but we will be dreaming of spring soon.
Thanks Mike. I enjoyed the challenge 🙂
This was really beautiful!
The breath of spring
sends winter-weary bones basking
Brilliant phrase. Loved it and the image choice.
Thanks so much 🙂
rondelet huh? nice! you have me inspired
Aw that’s so sweet, thanks 🙂
Beautiful. I know you must be waiting for your spring but, it ushers in our winter here… Not looking forward to it at all. Lovely prose.
Thanks heaps 🙂
Beautiful, graceful and eleagant!
Thanks… much appreciated 🙂
This is absolutely beautiful Norma =)
Aw thanks so much 🙂
Spring is poetry. How can you not write about it. A beautiful piece!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/
Thanks Charles 🙂
beautifully wriiten … loved the imagery and the form has come out really well
Thanks for your lovely comment 🙂
spring is love, this is charming.
🙂
Yes it is, thanks 🙂
I like the injection from Spring. It’s refreshing and new.
Thanks so much clariice 🙂
Beautifully written and thank you for the lesson in Rondelets 🙂
You’re welcome and thank you 🙂
Great personification of spring.
Here is my entry:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html
Thanks Jack 🙂
this is a great work of art and it seems that springs just adds so much to your work and it is so wonderful and lively
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/
Thanks so much Sarah. Much appreciated 🙂
This is such a sweet poem. I myself am horrible at sticking to rigid forms, and so I applaud you.
Yes, they can be difficult but they make you think outside the box. Thanks heaps 🙂
i like how you say that spring is coming to take the cold away
http://zongrik.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/triolet-vi/
Thanks so much Bat-Ami 🙂
Perfect! The imagery is maintained throughout the poem, and the idea of the breath of spring whispering hope and dreams – brilliant!
Rosie
Thanks so much Rosie, you just made my day 🙂
The breath of spring… I wish I could feel it too. Beautiful and fresh!
Thanks so much magheri. Appreciated 🙂
Hello.
Beautiful poem & your image is awesome!
Thanks for sharing.
Yesterday With You
Thanks Andy, it is a beautiful image isn’t it. Thanks for reading and commenting 🙂
The only word I can think of is ‘graceful’, I’m tempted to try this form myself. And I agree, the image is beautiful 🙂
Thanks for your lovely comment 🙂
I love it. Nice picture of Spring.. Thank you for stopping by and reading my poem.
Thanks Debra 🙂
I had to revisit this poem as it was so beautiful. I love your total command over this poem and yet all hidden from the final product.
The use of rhyme is so natural and unobtrusive.
The use of meter is just exemplary. The odd numbered iambic lines provide such a solid framework with that fourth line being so amazing — the hypen of “winter-weary” slowing this line, making it stand out even more — and for me at least sets up that penultimate line, the sixth line to not be scanned as iambs but instead has set up an expecation for this sixth line to stand out as much as the trochaic second line and the slowed down fourth line.
It really is a gem.
Thanks so much zumpoems! It’s great when someone looks deep into your poetry and sees more than meets the eye. You’ve been so encouraging and I truly appreciate it.
Norma 🙂
Gorgeous! Is it terribly wrong that as we look into the eyes of oncoming Winter, I long for the breath of Spring?
Thanks so much Danielle 🙂
Lovely form, well-executed. Thank you so much for the nomination! It means so much, especially coming from a poet such as yourself! 🙂
Thanks and you’re welcome. And thanks for the lovely compliment 🙂
Nice form, inspirational.
Thanks Duncan 🙂
Lovely poem and what a wonderful photo!
Thanks KD. The poem is beautiful isn’t it 🙂